tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6146913716621794931.post4395431963597917804..comments2014-06-23T18:29:10.187-07:00Comments on Jessica's writing journey: Graf # 9 objectJessica Riley's writing journeyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13226828829447266308noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6146913716621794931.post-35253143312141393872012-09-13T09:10:03.575-07:002012-09-13T09:10:03.575-07:00Gotta break a piece like this into shorter grafs f...Gotta break a piece like this into shorter grafs for the sake of the reader and to help the writer organize and separate thoughts as she goes along.<br /><br />This is really topnotch--we get the story and the story is a thousand times more important than a detailed description.<br /><br />But! Where does this piece really begin? I would argue that this ought to be the first sentence and everything before it could be dropped: "When I look at this chest I think of friendship. "johngoldfinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09322562737172405323noreply@blogger.com