Sunday, September 23, 2012

Intro 2 of cause essay

It was March in Maine and it had been a long cold winter. Compared to the two other winters I have experienced living in Maine, this one was the worst. I felt like I had been cooped up as a prisoner in my own home for far too long, but the time inside did give me plenty of opportunity to think. I had been wanting to go back to school for quite some time, but there was always something that came in the way. Something about the way I felt during those cold lonely months of winter made me realize that once and for all I was going to do something big for myself.


  1. This reads like it's a sentence short of nailing the topic, making it clear to the reader what's coming, what reasons for what this is will be all about. Gotta commit by the end of graf 1, Jessica!

  2. I was trying not to be to revealing. I thought the intro is a build up and then the next grafs are the three reasons? I guess I have it wrong?